Hmm. If it's too long I'd recommend not having it as a video. You might want to consider getting a box.net (
www.box.net) account for free, or a MegaUpload.com account or something.
Oh, and that text is pretty illegible.
Part 1:
I like the beginning. At 20 seconds in it sounds a bit empty with only drums. Bass addition is good, but felt very quiet. Again, at 55 seconds in, there is a noticeable gap between sections, which I dislike. At 1:30 melody dropping out to leave only bass or something else soft is, in my opinion, bad; the piece is left again feeling very empty - if you want to have just bass I'd make it louder... do you use headphones? May be that bass seems louder for you than me. Anyway. The melodies in sections are good, but I think they could each last for longer, and many 'gaps' could be cut out. I like the theme at 1:25, but it could do with some accompaniment; also sounds bare when changing between that and the next bits. I like the bit at 4: 15, and again at 4:40 where there is good accompaniment. You could have kept the melody going through the next drum bit, I think, to flow into the next area. This music is the sort of thing that I would think of as background-ish music, because it fits that well, however the gaps just... leave it too empty for that.
Part 2:
30 seconds in is really cool. But then, at 45, it just drops off into "empty" again. Sorry to repeat this, which I know I'm doing a lot, but I end up thinking of this piece like "#_#_#_#_...", where the # is something, and the _ isn't. It jerks around a bit, in this respect, and I would really encourage you to work on the _ parts so they're not so... _. Again, this is just my opinion, but my guess is it would be common with a few people. The loops are good, but they're not original; I've heard half of them before while playing with GB at school or with friends, so you need to figure out how to turn those same loops into your own material. What can you do with the loops to turn them into something
new? That's the sort of thing you should be asking yourself, I would argue. 4:10 was nice, I mist add, however the drums could have kept going to keep that flow. 4:50 was a great example of parts working together, but then there was more empty bass-ness, and it just... died. Also, the ending was too sudden - perhaps a fade-out might work, or have it build up to something big.
Final Advice for these:
Well, as I've said, you need to try and migrate away from stop, start, stop, start, #_#_ sort of thing. I'd try working on something small, perhaps 30 seconds to a minute in length, and in that experimenting with several simultaneous parts. Hope this has helped, and if you want me to clarify anything don't hesitate to ask!
Lenny